Undesirable:
Better: As stated, the landlord inflicted serious injuries on the tenant, including a broken left leg, lacerations to that leg, and several broken toes on the left foot. The altercation was witnessed by the tenant's spouse.
2. Do not use long introductory (throat clearing) phrases that add no special meaning. Use of phrases such as "the defense contends" and "it is important to emphasize that" generally add no substantive meaning to a sentence. Making matters worse, they prevent the reader from quickly reaching the important part of the sentence and may result in a loss of emphasis. As a general rule, one should get to the important point quickly.
Undesirable:
Better: The landlord injured the plaintiff by leaving a large ditch in the backyard.
3. Do use well-understood terms of art if they are more precise than general terminology and if you are writing to a professional audience. The beginning law student will have difficulty knowing when a term of art is likely to be well understood, as they all are new to the beginner. However, as time progresses, new law students will develop an easy familiarity with terms of art and the decision whether to use them will be less difficult.
Undesirable:
Better: In this case, involving the breach of fiduciary duties by corporate directors, the plaintiffs can not proceed in federal court because there is neither diversity of citizenship nor any federal question.